Hmmm...
I don't like this one as much but it's definately not bad. It's alitte too confusing for me but I think you were trying to go for something off the wall & unpredictable, no? I might be wrong. In my opinion it needs more structure about it, more coherence. There's too much going on and it's confusing. I don't know if that makes sense to you but that's what I got.
4/5